Seeds of the sea - the story of Grim

Hello everyone, this is a short story I'm working on.

I decided to put all the pages in one same link.
As I said in another post, it's NOT a mind blowing story just a good way for me to practice drawing and inking. ^^

There will be a new page every tuesday and friday.
It's completely free so enjoy it, share it with your buddies, etc...

I am absolutely open to all comment/critic so fire away!

Comments

[Jacob]

salut salut !
Pour moi le plus gro probléme c'est ta pers, souvent quelques lignes partent en couilles et ça rend de suite l'image un peu platte.
Et si je peux me permettre ^^ tu devrais poser un peu plus d'ombre, c'est souvent super blanc, du coup tu perds en atmosphere et en immersion pour le lecteur, puis les ombres peuvent t'aider à mieux comprendre tes volumes ( mais tu le sais déjà, c'est juste pour le plaisir de le dire, je me fait des remarque à moi même héhé )
Bref c'est tout ce que j'avais de cassant à dire ! hate de voir l'evolution de ton exercice :)

dirty english version :

from me , your major trouble is about perspective, it's makes your pictures flat.
and if I can afford, you should deal a little bit more with shadows, some strips are too white ( no background and no shadow effect on caracters . but as you said your purpose is inking and drawing, so maybe shadows are probably not really a big deal for you. But i think shadows can makes your 3D knowledge improoved if you care about. that's it ^^

I hope my english is not too difficult to understand , i'm sure it's full of horrors x) but it's also a good practice for me :) i learn it my self so, i'm never sure bout what i'm saying x) but the most important is the subject isn't it ? ^^

Yosh ! have fun !

[MoonSun]

Haha ca se voit tant que ca que les décors me saoulent royalement? ^^ merci pour les conseils, je pensais moi aussi et peutêtre ajouter plus d'ombre sur les persos.